In the last week of Term 2 we learnt how to use a variety of sentences to make our writing more effective.

Subject - predicate

Predicate - subject

Complex sentences

Simple sentences to create suspence, build tension or for impact.  

Check out these holiday paragraphs.

 

Running across the field I see gaps.  I think to myself, do I put in a chip?  The ball drops and I put in a nudge.  Then BOOM!  I got hammered into the mud.  But we scored a try and that is what counts.

Henri

Oh no, I thought.  My Dad.  He’s daring me to go off the terrain park and 360.  The wind blows a pile of sharp, cold snow into my face. O.K, here I go.  I’m getting speed O.K.  I jump.  I rotate.  Oh man.  The ground came too fast.  I rotate three quarters of a 360 my edge of my snowboard catches in the snow.  ‘Doh’ I’m on my face.

Angus 

On the last day of the holidays (Sunday), I went to my Otago soccer trails at the muddy oval.  I was trailing for goal keeper.  At the start we did some goalie training, like diving, stopping etc.  Then after that we did some short games and finally cooled down and departed.  When I got home and sat on the couch mostly all night.

Quinn

I lined up my shot.  As the defender was approaching I stretched my arms back and swung at the ball.  It flew gracefully through the air, landing just before the goal.  As my feet lunged forward my hockey stick out, just enough to tip the ball into the goal.

Sophie

In the holidays, I went on the lunge in Naseby.  I would fly down the steep slope on a tiny sledge, crashing into walls, nearly tipping over and hoping the sled wouldn’t break.  ‘Okay, go now’ the instructor said with a heavy German accent.  I pushed off.  I am speeding down the narrow icy track.  Lean!  I turn right, missing the wall by millimetres.  Lean the other way!!  This time I wasn’t so lucky.  ‘Ouch’  I shouted as I was riding vertically!

Zac 

Wellington.  Friday morning.  Excitement fills me.  Today, Uncle Pat is treating us to lunch in the Beehive and a tour of Parliament.  My sister and I meet our uncle and cousin, Kieran, outside the Beehive.  After lunch in the restaurant, we head back down-stairs.  Down into the civil defence bunker.  We wander through the bunker for a while, then climb the stairs to the actual parliament building.  The building is very grand and felt out of place.  Finally, we walk back through a long hallway, lined with pictures and back into the Beehive.

Anna